The only other thing, is the dynamics in spender, louder louder, softly softly – like the singers voice

Hi @jeff and @sxpoet

yes @Jeff there is certainly improvement from your earlier Pink Floyd air, say, for sure !!
it grows as it goes
better projection
good to see you experimenting with transpositions, nice one mate
these airs demonstrate good technical ability and a growing improvement with your instrument’s range

@sxpoet insofar to your prior comment =
“@jeff – looks like non-premium members don’t get any feed back?”

i put it to you that particular comment is felicity of expression – “because of this, therefore that”
it’s crooked logic – sorry
what is, is
ok

‘indignation inspires verse’

most of the fellas here play tenor, and, methinks it’s got a lot more voice and grunt and effect than alto

candidly lots of the guys are probably just to polite to say anything hey and moreover the tunes are tame

my 2c

1) sounds like a nursery hootennanny there is no colour or harmonic separation
2) no warmth or gusto, lacks swing and syncopation, no dynamics, timing rough, little flavour
3) timing is atrocious, the notes are stilted and bland, running out of puff and losing intonation at the end

that said you are doing much better than me good buddy 🙂
the drop wears away the stone
you can tell they are songs for piano
great effort all the while – don’t be so tremolous and vary the vibe
it probably gets better with a few more takes
again, these airs demonstrate good technical ability and a growing improvement with your instrument’s range
keep uploading, chin up, shoulders back, all the best @Jeff and bye for now
fax mentis incendium gloriae / the passion for glory is a torch to the mind